Comic 32 - Page10

Posted on 10th Jun 2012, 4:14 AM in Chapter Two
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MassDet 10th Jun 2012, 4:14 AM edit delete
MassDet
Well here it is. Page 10. It’s really an exciting comic book isn’t it. A day of shopping, the rest of the day at the library, and then dinner plans. I promise it gets better though.

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Kermit 10th Jun 2012, 2:36 PM edit delete reply
IMO, there are worse ways to do exposition than to show some scenes from daily life. The important thing is not to fall into the trap of showing every last detail of how that plays out, lest you spend a year narrating two days' worth of slice-of-life content with little or no plot relevance. I don't think you're doing that now -- the pacing is fine. I was just thinking back to some really interesting commentary that Jon Kilgannon and Mark Sachs put in their archives for the webcomic A Miracle of Science (http://project-apollo.net/mos/) back in the day when it was still active. (I tried finding the specific page again -- I think it was around when they first introduced the Qin Shihuangdi, but when I go back to look for it all I find are long explanations of orbital mechanics.)
MassDet 10th Jun 2012, 11:59 PM edit delete reply
MassDet
Heya Kermit. Yeah I am hoping I have a good balance of everything. I think I get more frustrated than anyone that I am on the twice of month schedule because I want to post the cool stuff. But if I went to weekly right now it wouldn't be long before I would start getting behind.

It was a productive day for the group, even if it wasn't action packed. And the action will come so it will hopefully make up for the library trips haha.
Grey Garou 10th Jun 2012, 10:28 PM edit delete reply
Grey Garou
Hey, not every page needs to be an epic battle. It's good to establish mood, the world in which they live, pacing, flavoring the characters and the plot. Gotta build a strong foudation to have a house that stands tall.

If I may make any observation or two, the panel borders seem to me a tad thick, almost appearing as frames like with painting and somewhat distracting from the art within. And I think it would also help if they were of uniform thickness (the tops seem wider than the other three sides).

And it might be worth the time to experiment with two-point perspective. Elevation, Plan, and paraline systems of perspective work, but I've found that working two and three-point perspective into the sequence here and there helps to add dimension. Just thought I'd get my two cents in worth.

Wild banner! Very eye-catching.
MassDet 11th Jun 2012, 12:03 AM edit delete reply
MassDet
Thanks for saying nice things about the banner. I am kinda patting myself on the back for that one heh.

I think you are right about the borders. I hadn't really noticed it until you pointed it out. I will make not of that in the future. Granted I do have something of a buffer so it wont be right away. And I know you are right about the perspective. Every time I read an actual comic I look up at my own pages and realize that I am still not there. I have been trying lately to make my pages more dynamic, so hopefully future pages will be more interesting in that respect.
cattservant 11th Jun 2012, 7:59 PM edit delete reply
cattservant
First supper then more education. Sounds like a plan!
Hausey1 14th Jun 2012, 1:22 AM edit delete reply
I am very pleased with the way the comic is coming along! I hope to see more in the future! Great job on the grapics!
CyberSkull 21st Jun 2012, 5:32 AM edit delete reply
CyberSkull
I liked the library scene.
MassDet 21st Jun 2012, 1:04 PM edit delete reply
MassDet
Thanks guys.